Date: 15-09-2008 (Monday)
Time: 16:00 hours
I got into the train. Not a soul around in my compartment. I did not expect the train to be lifeless. I was disappointed. The train started moving. I thought of dozing off. I stretched myself on my berth and closed my eyes.Suddenly i felt some movement around me. I woke up and saw her standing in front of me. She was Violet colour tops and a violet color shorts. She had the perfect figure every guy would dream of. 34-28-34. My mind measured her with pin point accuracy. I am good in statistics.
She had a mobile phone in one hand and a novel in the other. She had blue eyes and had smooth hair. She tried to push her bag under the seat, butshe could not do it. She looked at me with a pleading look and said," Can you please push this bag underneath the seat". Immediately I sprang up from my seat and tried to help her only to realise that the bag was indeed heavy. I did not want to give up.What would she think of me? Would she thing that am not strong enough to help her? Thoughts disturbed me. She came close to me, bent down and helped me in pushing the bag underneath the seat. I could smell her perfume. She had the most beautiful skin texture.
We stood up.She said Thank you and went and sat opposite to my berth. I acted as if I did not notice her at all. Hi! My name is Anu. I turned towards her and smiled at her. Well my name is Chriz ( I said that in a husky tone).Did she fall in instant love with me? I knew she was. But she controlled her emotions. Ilike girls who control their emotions.
Her lips were pink and looked like fresh cherry dipped in strawberry sauce.She opened her novel and started reading it. She stretched and planted her feet on my berth. Oh! Her feet was tender and neat.Occasionally she would look at me and I would immediately look outside the window as if I did not notice her.
The gentleman in me did not like my lady love suffering such cruel treatment from the ticket collector (Yes Anu was my lady love. It was love at first sight). I offered to pay the penalty myself. I could see her look at me with gratitude. She was smiling at me. My attitude was overflowing. She told that she would pay me once she gets down from the train. I just nodded my head. I exhibited complete gentleman nature.
She tried to sit down, but lost her balance and before she could fall down I grasped her, only to find that She was indeed heavy. As a result I fell down with her and landed on top of her. She mistook me. She thought that I was trying to take advantage of her. She pushed me aside and gave me a dirty stare and went and sat in her seat.She did not speak anything to me.She started reading the book again. She was angry again. I knew it.
I sat in my seat and I could not face her. I closed my eyes and before I knew I started dozing. I opened my eyes to find a guy sitting next to me. He looked like john abraham. He had long hair and he was wearing a sleeveless shirt and he indeed had a muscular frame. He was oggling at her. A tinge of possessiveness crept inside me. How can he look at my girl? I gave him a mean stare.He sarcastically smirked at me and turned his attention towards her. To make matters worse for me, he infact started a conversation with her.
He introduced himself as Richard and said that he was a ramp model. She seemed interested.She was smiling at him. I was fuming with rage. They started talking about the novel she was reading.He was playing with words. I wanted to tell her that I am a writer too. But she did not even look in my direction. He asked her to give him the book. She gave the book to him and when he took the book from her, he started praising her for having the best pair of hands. He even held her hands and said that she had the most beautiful fingers. Her smiled turned into fear. I wanted to punch him in the nose, but when I saw his physique, I started respecting the art of non violence.
He was still holding her hands She did not like his attitude. She removed her hands from his clasp and forcefully pulled the book from his hands and gave a dirty look that sent the message ," All you guys are one and the same". He did not expect the sudden change in her behavior. Shame engulfed his face. He tried to smile, but he could not. He turned towards me to check if I had seen him in his hour of shame. I smiled to myself and looked outside the window.The train moved on...
... The train journey will continue
-Chronicwriter
31 Comments
Hey... How come d lead character in dis fiction has ur name?
ReplyDeleteHmmm and chiss u shud've flashed ur pic (dt one where u sport a nice black sleeveless tee jus lik Mr.Koi Mil Gaya)
Chriz, u started watching lot of tamil movies i guess... anyways its interesting. wen u ll start wid the nxt part??
ReplyDelete:) Nice.
ReplyDeleteWaiting for the next part!
GBU
Arti
the girl is atleast 6 months pregnant
ReplyDeletewhen did u become the DDLJ script writer??
ReplyDeleteKeshi.
That is soo tamil movie... hehe.. never the less.. its interesting.. waiting for the next part... :)
ReplyDelete@sins
ReplyDeletewhy cant the hero be me? i wanted to flash the picture.. but that picture was taken before my triple typhoid attack.. eppadi irundhaa naan ippadi aayitein
@ferdinand
ReplyDeletewhen did i quit watching tamil movies to start all over?
next part will be posted tmrw..
@arti
ReplyDeletewelkum to my page.. do come for the next part.. ill visit ur page..
@akka
ReplyDeletei changed the picture.. i did nt see the tummy then.. how abt this girl?
@keshi
ReplyDeletetoo much of movies i know... but i know the climax wudnt be different
@thanamoi
ReplyDeletewhich tamil movie are we talking abt.. its a real story
but its really good...waiting for more :)
ReplyDeleteKeshi.
too many films chriz...too many films!! ;)
ReplyDeletenice story tho :))
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ReplyDeleteIsnt it like the Unnaku 18 ennakku 20??Anyway lets see the another parts...
ReplyDeleteso very romantikk i too haad such a train journey but the diff was it was a crush hi hi
ReplyDeletelovely read
u r a good writer.
*fingers crossed*
ReplyDeleteMake the next part even better pleej!!
I love yr place..and PICTURE..as always ;)
anythin with train journey reminds me of Jab We Met....lookin forward to ur story part 2
ReplyDeletewhat is this chris never knew that clicking a link from my feed reader will throw me directly at your comment page instead of the blog page. please see to it.. :)
ReplyDeleteBTW wating for the next part :)
hmmm.. and then??
ReplyDeleteEk choti se love story......lol
ReplyDeletewow, i loved it, i like the slight humor u put in ur sentences, very funny. I m waiting for part 2 now :)
ReplyDeleteCheers
C.
@keshi
ReplyDeleteyes i am now writing mys ecod part.. tuning the climax
@trinaa
you too? hehe
@sri
ReplyDeleteyes i guess it has some portion of that ovie too.
@priya
come up with a post on ur train journey then... would be fun to read
@aauyshi
ReplyDeletewelcome back girl...
keep coming''
@jab we met
yes i like that movie too. wont dissappoint with the second part
@santosh
ReplyDeleteis it leading directly here? what should ido?
@divya
ReplyDeletethen the seond part will appear soon
@akshay
Bog love story for a small boy like me
@cess
ReplyDeleteglad that u liked the first part.. would come up with a suitable second part too
ur imagination is reaching unimaginable levels:P
ReplyDeletewhere's part2?
cool cool cool...lets see the 2nd part now :D
ReplyDeletewell written as usual :P
all men are the same :P how true...
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